Lo: can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?

As they leapt from the tower ledge, plunging down, their gorgeous wings sprung up just as they were about to hit the rough concrete ground. There was a summer breeze and the air thermos keeping them up soon enough they were gracefully flying and soaring everywhere. They darted from here to there. They could see the tall king’s tower below them in the background it was a fantastic view and they were gliding so well. Their wings fitted perfectly onto their throbbing backs now blistered because they had been up in in the air flying for so long. Icarus was going higher and higher until… `I am the best at flying, I can even fly higher than all the gods on mount Olympus. ` Although Apollo had heard this terrible news and he was furious. Apollo had seen that they had attached their wing onto their backs with wax so Apollo sent down his rays of sun to melt all the wax off their backs. Daedulus tried to warn Icarus not to glide too high to the sun, however Icarus took no notice of Daedulus` words and completely ignored everything his father had said to him. No instead Icarus went as far as he could go right next to the sun. Icarus had now plummeted straight in to the ocean slap bang in the middle of the sea. He was never to be seen again!

The end!

As they leapt from the vast tower ledge, their strong, powerful wings spread. They soared upwards. Icarus and Daedulas weren’t very good at first but soon enough they were gracefully floating in the gentle summer’s breeze. They had mastered flying. They had flown far, far away from the king’s tower when Icarus started to get higher and higher. “Look at me! I am inspirational! I am even better than Apollo, the sun god!”Icarus yelled loudly! “Don’t go too high Icarus; your wings will fall off!”Warned Daedulas. “My wings won’t fall off! They are strong and powerful!”Laughed Icarus, as he flew closer and closer to the sun. Suddenly, the wax on his back started to melt! “Oh no! My wings are falling off!”Screamed Icarus. He started to fall. “I did warn you Icarus, I feared this Icarus.”Murmured Daedulas. Icarus plummeted into the deep, dark sea below him and he was never to be seen again.

THE END

LO: Can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?

They leapt from the edge, as they plummeted down the side of the king’s tower towards the dark blue sea. The wings opened and caught them just an inch before the ground. They darted up, whilst they glided through the warm afternoon air. As Daedalus was flying through the air Icrus was getting the hang of flying he was soaring through the sky Daedalsus was worried about him because he was so high. Icrus said he was better than the sun god Apollo. Apollo was angry at this and started sending sun raise towards the wax on his back. The wax started to melt and all of a sudden he started plummeting towards the black sea. His body was never to be seen again.

The end

LO: can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?

They leapt off the wooden ledge and plummeted down the side of the tower .The azure wings opened at the last minute catching them just before they hit the glistening yellow sand bellow them . They shot up into the sky by now there backs had started to burn , blister and boil .By then Icarus had mastered the art of flying and became ignorant to his father . Icarus was going quite high so Daediluss had to warn him not to go too high because the wax on hiss back might melt off his back. But Icarus ignored him and simply said I am the best at flying even better than the sun god Apollo . Apollo over heard this and became especially angry and sent boiling sun rays to melt the wax off Icarusies back …AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH

SPLAT.

Lo: Can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?

 They leapt  from the tower ledge. As they plunged down their glittering feathered wings unfurled. They shot up just a few inches above the ground! Daedalus warned Icarus not to go to high nether too low or the wax will melt and the feathers will get heavy from the water, but Iacrus did not listen to his farther, and he flew a lot higher than he should of, he shouted “I’m better than Apollo!” Apollo heard this and he ordered the sun to shine his rays towards Icarus, but then the wax on his back started to melt. Suddenly he started to tumble , tumberling so much he couldn’t control it. At that moment he fell to his death and he died from the impact of the water. Icarus was never to been seen again by his farther.

The end

LO: Can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?

As they leapt off the tower ledge the white glistening wings unfolded and they shot up. Then all of a sudden they both glided across the sea. Icarus got the hang of flying but he flew to high so Dadilies had to call him back but Icarus did not listen, soon after that Icarus was competing against the sun god Apollo. After a short amount of time Apollo shone his light over the glistening towns, then suddenly Icarus’ wax started to melt and dripped into the sea, after a few seconds of sweating and worrying Icarus plummeted into the blue sea of DEATH!

Thursday 1 October 2015

L.O. Can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?

They leapt from the tall, old battered tower ledge. They jumped of they were falling but emgently the warm cosy wings started to unfold. Suddenly Icares gets the hang of flying and he marstered it straight away. Daderless gave Icares 1 warning not to fly to hi to the sun otherwise the wax on your back will start to melt of. Icaes ignored that warning and said that he was way better than Helios the god of the flaming sun. Helios was furious to hear what he was hearing. Strait away out of know where a powerful strike of the sun to come down and strike Icares on his red back suddenly his huge powerfully wings fall off like a volcano about to arupt. Icares started to fall he was terrified the biggest shock of his dark lonely life. Suddenly Icares just dropped strait into the dark, deep sea. Death was ahead of him. He hit strait into the warter and all of his bones snapped!

Thursday 1st October 2015
Lo: can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?

As they darted down the king’s tower their tender ivory white wings spread out across their blistering backs .they glided up! They soared across the electric blue sky their feathered wings easily cutting through the rushing air. Icarus swiftly started to shoot upwards towards the scorching sun. “Boy don’t fly to high” cried dadelus but icarus was swooping and twisting above him to notice. “ with my talent for this flying I could do anything even take on the sun god” whispered icarus with a smirk. The furious sun god Apollo over heard and sent the beaming rays of the sun to melt the wax sticking the battered wings together. the sun shone upon icarus and slowly red wax started to trickle down his back. Then suddenly icarus started to fall ,icarus tumbled out of the sky and plunged down into the crashing sea below, the impact crumpling every bones in his body. for years icarus rotted in the furious sea forgotten by all but his father who wept for the rest of his life .

LO: can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?

They leapt out of the tower window, adrenalin pumping in there vains. They were out! They were plummeting towards the ground, seconds away from death! Their wings sprang to life as they were lifted into the azure sky, like the gods had lifted them and welcomed them to their world. The blistering pain from the wax had nearly vanished. “Don’t fly t high or the wax on your back will melt! Daedilus warned. Icarus ignored his father for he thought he was better at flying than the sun god himself! Up he soared until he was flying with the clouds. The powerful sun god, Apollo was furious that a mere mortal like Icarus would challenge him! Apollo shot a raise of sun upon Icarus’s back. Icarus plunged into the waters deep.

Icarus was never to be seen again. Or was he?

L O can I retell the ending of a story using  noun phrase and accurate verb choice ?

Deadelus and Icarus leaped for their life off the tower ledge , Deadelus was first to jump and  Icarus was second . Deadelus  plummeted down and then  Deadelus shot up into the  salty air. And then it was Icaruses turn to jump off the tall jagged tower  he took a deep breath and he jumped! He was just about to hit the ground until his wings unfolded and he took of like a bird in to the air

Both Icarus and Deadelus were air born  they were both amazing at weaving in and out of houses . At first Icarus was terrified of dying  but Icurus was flying really really high “ICARUS GET DOWN HERE” Deadelus shoted he flew so high and scremmed “Im better than Apollo  Apollo hated that and in fact he  sent a sun ray and the ray was so hot that his wax melted and the wings fell of and he fell straight into the sea.

THE END