I’m locked in; I can’t breathe; It’s suffocating me.
The only thing I can see is darkness, pitch black.
All I can hear is my voice trying to speak, but not much noise is coming.
My dirty, red hair is flowing in the wind, in my eyes so I can’t see.
A single tear rolls down my face.
Help.
WOW That was really dramatic and sad. I liked it when you said just one tear dribbles down her cheek and its really powerful. :]
Thank you Leo! 🙂 I also like that sentence. I feel having a single tear is alot more powerful than having 2 or 3 tears.
That is amazing, it really brings the reader into the story. I love cliff hangers and you really have done that. You are good at writing. Give your self a pat on your back.
well done flora “a single tear rolls down my face” i fell like that really shows the emotions of the character like shes sad to be there but she fells like she belongs there.
Flora, I love your writing especially the first line ‘I’m locked in; I can’t breathe; It’s suffocating me. It gives me the sense of what it’s like. Well done! 🙂