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Mayan creation story

Before everything there was nothing.

Nothing but a bottomless casum filed with Icy, black water and above it: a endless deap blue sky stretching as far as time rules.

Up from the endless depths the shadow of a massive serpent rose towards the surface. It broke the surface as a figure swooped down from the empty sky. The figure was Huracan, the glorious ruler of the sky. Furthermore the grand fethered surpnt:  Kulkulkan the majestic ruler of all the sea.

They conversed and decided (after a long meeting) that they reqired beings to count the days and praise their names.

A ripple in the water alerted them. Then out of the sea emerged land.

The new land was coverd in lush vegetation and jade grass. The gods populated the new land with animals. But to their dismay when they asked the animals to praise their names a cocofinny of screeching tore through the air like a express train. Enraged Huracan rored “ the perfect beings shal feast of your cooked flesh.”

Afterwards the gods tried mud people but they were more useless than the animals for they froze in the sun and melted when the rain came

Intent on succeeding, the gods turned next to the grand perent gods for some advice. That turned out to be a wise move as the grandparent gods had the sugesgion of wooden beings.

Therefore Kulkulkan and Huracan made people out of wood. But the wooden people did not have anny hearts or brains so they could not remember to count the days or prase their creators names.

The gods were furios, so they created a massive flod but not all wodden people were wiped out. Next the gouger of faces and sudden blod letter plagued the people but still some lived on.

The remaining wodden people fled to the lush forests to live on as apes.

Then a band of three animals brough the gods the frut of the maze plant the gods were puzzled but tried it anyway. The people of maze were perfect. Too perfect. The gods were annoyed. the maze people knew everything.

Then the gods clouded their minds so they would have to ask the gods for wisdom until the end.

before

Tears falling,

Sirens blering,

Memories gone,

But before…

When before was standing

when before was a place you could go to

The earth shook. she ran. ran from the crumbling memories. From the terror.

As walls fell,

Hard steel buckled,

But she ran. ran to. Ran to the saftey. The saftey of the open.

Tears falling,

Sirens blering,

Memmories; gone

And travelling to a place.

But this place is different.

Because before had crumbled.

It had fallen to now. But fallen through.

A man and a temple

The man limped into the room, blood trickled of his leg leaving a trail behind him, rain pattered on the cracked stone floor, a canopy of trees shielded the ruin from the worst of the storm. Dense trees surround the temple from all sides like a huge brick wall. But the man had made it. He had battled his way through the rainforest and won. Now he would collect his prize. Now he could see the gold softly glowing in the half light. He lunged forwards, towards the gold. He noticed skeletons propped up on the crumbling walls.  The man started to move towards the gold. And also the man was parched, he lent down , cupped his hands and drank from the little lake that stood in his way.

Next, he waded through the rapidly growing lake and clambered up the stairs. And finally he put the gold in his sack. He clambered back down the stairs and entered the lake. When he was halfway through he sensed danger. Then, something brushed passed his leg. The water rippled close to him. Then his blood went cold. Thousands of silver fish were charging at him. Seconds later a stabbing pain tore through his leg. He was dragged under the water. The water went red and his limp body surfaced yet he could be anything he had been torn apart.

Pathius and the island

Miles along the streams of time, there was a man. This man drove the forges of a prosperous city. And yet on one fateful day, Pathius found himself being paraded into the grand city plaza.

It was so unfair thought pathius. He hadn’t committed the crime he was being exiled for. That morning pathius had prayed to the gods to have mercy on him but to no avail.

Now pathius was being marched out the grand city gates and into the dark wilderness. Visions of beasts floated in front of his eyes.

Hours later, in a small clearing, the men broke the chains off pathiuses tired arms. Pathius didn’t look back as he slunk into the gloomy undergrowth.

Days later pathius was following a lush river valley, full of emerald green trees and sheltered by steep mountains. When pathius turned a sharp bend in the river, an awesome sight greeted him: the sea, stretching towards the horizon as flat as a newly built road. Giant sweeping cliffs And best of all: a beautiful island just off the coast and bristling with glorious fruit trees boasting glassy, juicy fruits. But then to pathiuses great dismay there was no way to reach this secluded heaven, the answer to all his needs just out of pathiuses reach. Unless, he could cave a boat out of a tree trunk. After all there were sharp stones littering the golden ribbon of beach. And trees lining the boundaries.

That secluded heaven was calling.

In the evening light, pathius dragged his boat onto the cold sand; he was on the road to a better life.

When pathius reached the little island he was tired. So he hastily constructed a minute hut to sleep in.

Then he glimpsed light. Marcoyos, leader of the refugees pointed. His group of refugees charged forwards towards the dancing light. They got close but there was a problem. A glistening ribbon of jet black water was in there path.

In the morning, pathiuses eyes flickered open. He hopped of his primitive bed, out the door and onto the beach. Gazing across the channel, pathius spotted a problem. What looked like an army of monsters were patrolling the beach. Then it hit pathius: they were people caked in sand and clothed in torn rags. Pathius felt sorry for them. So he paddled out to them brining them gifts of fruit. When he arrived he asked to see their leader. Whilst he talked, the refugees descended on his food like ravenous wild dogs. Devouring it all in a matter of seconds. Meanwhile pathius had got off to a good start with the leader. He had also found out that the refugees wanted to join pathius on his island. Pathius agreed because he was once one of them. So it wasn’t long before pathius was ferrying them across to his island.

Years had passed. The future had come and gone and pathiuses island grown. The island still had lush forests yet it had grown a sprawling metropolis where pathiuses house was. Complete with a bustling port and beautiful gardens.

Standing in front of pathiuses grand palace, he was pleased. The palace had glistening towers, astonishing windows and lush grounds. Yet pathius was not gazing at his magnificent palace. Nor his huge ports or marble streets lined with expensive houses. No. He was standing in front of a huge crowd of citizens all waiting to hear what pathius had to say. Then pathius broke the silence. “we are gathered here to discuss some urgent business” he paused, then added:” this concern is the gods” “they have abandoned us” a murmur ran through the crowd” I know they are not real; they let me be unfairly exiled. And they have left your home to be ravaged by war” “so just conceder those words.” Then pathius turned and marched back inside his grand palace. When inside pathius marched briskly up to his bedroom/study and sat down at his grand oak desk. He started to read a heavy leather covered book.

Meanwhile on high Olympus the gods heard pathiuses words. Zeus was enraged, so he nominated Artemiss to go and warn pathius about his behaviour. So she thundered down to Pathiuses’ island under the cover of darkness, and then flew through Pathiuses’ bedroom window. When Pathiuses saw her, he gasped and ran to the door, which was conveniently locked. Parthiuses turned around to look Artemis. The stared at each other, neither saying a word. It was Artemis who broke the silence “you have dishonoured the gods.”

“There are no gods to dishonour” Parthiuses snorted.

Artemis then whispered “change your ways, change your future or feel the consequences.”

As those settled in his hears, a dark mist seeped through the open window and under the door, filling the room. The mist was so thick it clogged Parthuises’ eyes and mouth.

In an instant, it dispersed.  The mist had gone. It left no mark not even Artemis who had been standing there seconds before.

Pathiuses was left rattled and tired from the ordeal. The tiredness finally enveloped him and he fell gently into his soft bed.

Parthuises woke up bright and early along with the gentle songs of birds. He hopped out of his warm bed and strolled over to his wardrobe, thinking about the clothes he would where. He got dressed and cursed into his banquet hall for a glorious brecfast. Pathius was halfway through his delicious brecfast when a guard marched in and said” lord, there are refugees waiting on the beach for pemition to be let in” pathius quickly commanded” messy people wandering the streets of my magnificent masterpiece ? I think not” “tell them to leve immediately” he paused then added “and ask some skilled miners, I need them for some urgent business; tell them to be here in half an hour.”

 

Yet he was thinking about the strange dream he had. He decided it wasn’t artemiss who warned him. Pathiuses concluded it was just his mind playing tricks on him. After all he was tired. Pathius couldn’t forget the words she had said. “Change your ways, change your future” thought Pathiuses. “Ok then, I will.” Pathius said to himself.

Pathius met with skilled workmen half an hour later in the city square. They marched in silence towards the shrine to artemiss, lifting their heavy pickaxes along the muddy track. When they reached the shrine, Pathius ordered the men to destroy it. As soon as the first blow fell, dark clouds formed over the forest and the air became crisp and cold.

“ok” Pathius said “ it is time to return to the city.” Pathius said with a hint of worry. The men left their pickaxes and ran. Pathius ran to his palace he ran into his room and locked the door. He fell asleep quickly on his magnificent bed.

The morning came and Pathius’ eyes gently flipped open. He felt strange, cold and wet. Like he was sleeping in a swimming pool. Then it stuck pathius, his bedroom was a swimming pool. There was a foot of ice cold water in his room. He opened the elegant window to see a boat floating gently past the grand palace window. The city was in turmoil, everything pathius had created was destroyed, drowned people floated limply on the icy black water. To save himself, pathius dived out of his window and into the evil water that covered his beautiful city. When he hit the water pathiuses energy was quickly sapped as he floundered in the water. It was a miracle when pathius was dragged onto a fishing boat cold, shivering and tired yet still alive. Even better, Marcoyos was on the boat. When pathius had rested and regained some off his energy he stood on deck barking orders. They sailed for the river witch inevitably led to a city.

It took long and arduous days but finally pathius reached a city. When he left the boat pathius was glad too feel the soft springy grass under his feet. He ordered his men to set up camp near the city walls. So his men obeyed and a small cluster of tents sprang up on the river bank. Pathius ordered a meeting with Marcoyos. when Marcoyos clambered trough the tent door pathius said” this meeting is to discuss our attack strategy on this city” Marcoyos quickly replied:”we cannot attack megamemnon, he has the gods on his side.” “I do not care” retorted pathius. “Well, my men shall not fight. “TRATOR” shouted pathius. Marcoyos slunk out of the tent opening.

“Lord, Marcoyos is taking his men and the ship” gasped a tired messenger. “destroy the ship” pathius hotly retorted.

Meanwhile on the ship, Marcoyos said to his men: “we shall find ourselves a new home and leave this hubristic man named pathius.” Then flaming streaks of light filled the sky.

On high Olympus the gods were watching, they had decided that Marcoyos was a honourable man yet pathius was not. So they hatched a plan.

Marcoyos was a honourable man so artemiss raced down to the boat. Fog formed around the boat then it disappeared, pathius was enraged. Then the fog formed around him and he disappeared.

Marcoyos appeared in a lush green opening. On the other hand pathius appeared in a rowing boat on the ocean with the sea lapping gently at the boat side. Pathius tried to leave the boat but he found himself unable to jump out

As the years passed pathius grew older he found himself never hungry nor thirsty. But he was longing to get out of the microscopic boat. He had passed many beautiful coast lines but he could never explore them. Never to walk along them freely. And pathius was trapped in the boat until the day he died.

Meanwhile Marcoyos had created his own city. Magnificent, yes, but always letting in refugees. And it was safe due to huge intimidating walls. He had even his own family with a son called agatheus, life has happy.

The hooded figure

I looked up and saw a huge hulky figure; he was enveloped in expensive armour with intricate patterns on his shield.  But I only looked for a fraction of a second because he was storming towards me.

Two men fighting scampered in front of him. A bad move I thought. A deathly scowl took hold on his face. It suted him. His face was peppered in scars. He threw a punch at one of the men. The man soared high into the air and landed on the shingle near me.

The hulky man channelled a path of destruction. He stepped on the dead and wounded not caring. Then I decided it was time to run. I sprinted into my hut, only stopping to lock the door. I cowered in the corner of the hut. Hoping this hooded figure wasn’t as mean as his looks were conveying. Though if he was i was as god as dead. Then a loud crash. The door fell uselessly to the floor. It had been reduced to mach wood. The man thundered towards me, crouched down and rasped” rejoin the fight.”

Icaruses final flight

LO: Can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?

They leapt from the tower, skimmed the walls and up they went. They glided above the cold black sea. Their wings gently fluttering in the crisp autumn air. When Icarus mastered his wings he gracefully soared up. Higher and higher he went closer and closer to the sun he came. Dadalus called” Icarus stop climbing” but Icarus ignored him. Over beautiful mountainsides they flew caching stunning views of golden beaches like ribbons leading to the azure horizon. Yet Icarus was still climbing. Then to seal his fate Icarus said “I can fly even higher than Apollo but Apollo heard this. He was not pleased with Icarus. He ordered the sun to shine its rays on Icarus. No sooner than Apollo said this then the sun broke throw the silvery clouds to shine its gleaming rays on Icarus. Icarus immediately knew he was in for trouble. The was on his back heated up in the sun, blistering his back and started to spread and drip off him, the wings loosened and the feathers slowly but surely fluttered off.

Icarus careered out of control, the black sea racing up to meet him. Icarus let out a last frustrated scream then he hit the water. A crimson trickle of blood left his crumpled body drifting away trough the black water. Icaruses body then sank beneath the cold waves.

Dadalus was worried; he could not see Icarus anywhere. Not near the silvery clouds, not above the mountains. Then in the sea below Dadalus spotted a crimson streak in the water and the limp lifeless body of Icarus beneath, just visible in the sea below