Darkness
The darkness surrounds me closing in on the little tin that I sit in. Nobody understands the pain that I sit through. Nobody understands the things that I sit through. I feel like the world has stopped but the darkness does not. Here I am in a little tin I keep it closed but people keep peaking in.
In a blink of the eye
i was lost boy scared of evrything i remember my mother said “go my boy i will see you again”i never did, I wonder the streets looking for someone to aid me. I found no one, ifelt like the only one on the planet. the crows feasting on the bodies of the opend eyed dead and bricks falling like the buildings did and the words help me and no way out spray painted on the walls, it looked like a forest with no tees or a zoo with no animals. I manege to find a place to lay my head and go to sleap maby I will wake up and all this will be a dream.
I try to find my memories but there under all the ruble.
The beginning and the end
Many shooting stars ago in the most feared city there were three brothers their names were Creon, Roach and Sandman.
They left Sparta and travelled day and night through deserters but one night as they layed their heads down, the lumps of sand collapsed down from an earthquake quickly the brothers awoke to see weapons and gold. But suddenly Creon reacted and stabbed the beasts through its throat wall Roach and Sandman were looking at the gold and Roach said “now we have something to eat”.
One night as the brothers watched the lights go out like a blue flame; Creon said “look at what we have built”. They agreed to go and walk around their magnifsunt city.
But as they were escorted through the diamond doors a black figure with a venom voice came and stabbed Roach and Sandman, Creon ran. And left his brothers to die. But heard Roach screamed “Creon help us”.
But he heard other moans of sorrow he ran to the weeping sound, he found a lady in the mud he asked “what is wrong” she replied in a sad lonely voice “I do not have a home” Creon could not feel sorry to say “ come to my plaice” “okay”.
Creon and Persephone had a child called Paris.
Many dark nights past but one night was not the same as the others he dreamed of a dark figure saying “you have one more chance to make it right “. He awoke with a shiver down his spine and new it was a message from the mighty gods and he went straight to the mighty Arideny and asked about the dream she froze like a ice sculpture and said in a worried voice “I’m sorry to say but that is a sign of a terrible war”Creon studded “n n no it doesn’t” Arideny replied “yes it dose and your son will die a terrible death” Creon with a tear down his eye replied “m m my son is immortal your lying! Guards seas her”
Many moons past and Paris grew up but unknown to him Creon grew selfish and hid all of his gold in the floor boards. But Persephone found the gold and spent it all sending Creon into a volcano like rage before Creon murdered his wife and commits suicide.
And Paris has now taken over his father’s city.
Many seasons past and Paris started a terrible war but the gods did not let Paris win so Zeus sent Ares and Hades down. Hades mixed Ares sword with the yellowiest gold and Ares descised himself as a soldier and stabbed Paris and Paris turned to the yellow gold and shattered to the ground.
Lo: Can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?
They leapt like new born birds from the tower ledge and there Perl Wight wings opened as fast as a lightning bolt from Zeus and shot up like a catapult. The wings glided gracefully above the neon blue sea. Icrus became over confident and flew as high as an eagle above the clouds and the sun pealed of the wax like a scab. The wings fell apart faster than a shooting star and icrus fell like a rock down the side of a cliff. He froze like an ice scolpcher in fear and wonder if this was his last breath and it was and he slept with the fishes.
The end by Milo