Big blue eyes

Many orbits ago, when the world was pure. There was a small but loved town called Crete. In this town lived a beautiful young girl called Shappious .She had a wonderful gift, her eyes were always wide with amazement and they twinkled like two big blue sapphires.

One tragic night shappious’s father had called into her mother’s bedroom. Because of a fatal illness going around Crete, Shappious had found her lifeless mother tangled in her unwashed bed sheets .Her mother had gone to bed early and her life had slipped away whilst in a deep sleep. Slowly and painfully her father’s life left too because of the heart break he had felt for his loving wife. This left Shappious by herself on the lonely streets of Crete.

Grieve filled years past by and Shappious grew taller and more memorizing every day. Unfortunately she had learnt to use her gift the wrong way. Because couldn’t afford her own food, she used her eyes to charm people into giving her all she needed and more, for free. Every night she would come home to her newly built camp with a basket full of sweet delicacies all for herself. One hot flustering Shappious thought to herself  “I am so well off, I can charm people into giving me what I want and some people on the streets are dying of starvation ,I’m better at thievery than Hermes!”. Hermes had heard Shappiouses thoughts and was enraged “a mortal thinks she can out do me! “he boomed.

The night passed and the sun rose, the next morning, Shappious was strolling through town when her gaze fell upon a gleaming silver necklace. Swiftly her hand reached out and clasped around the necklace. The shopkeeper who had been browsing his rubies was now fixing his deathly stare on Shappious. Her legs started to move, she was running. Despite the speed of Shappious’s feet the shopkeeper was much faster as it was like his feet had wings. When he caught up with Shappious he shoved her against the wall and whispered “do not make a fool of yourself you can’t out do me! “and with a cloud of mist he was gone. Shappious stumbled to the grown gasping for breath what that strange man mean? “She mumbled.

After a night of lurching in and out of sleep the news had spread that Achilles was won the battle and was passing through Crete on the way home. Ever since Shapppious was a mere child  she had dreamt of owning horses such as Achilles’ this was a perfect opportunity to prove just how good she was at thievery .Shappious spent the next coming weeks plotting her master plan. When the day finally arrived, Achilles strode into town next to his immortal horses with a parade of soldiers marching behind him. Achilles had stopped to great the king of Crete when Shappious decided to take her move. She crept up to the horses and tore at their rains and she swung upon their backs, galloping into town with the whole Greek army running after here. Hermes had been watching her and he was truly amazed “she has made a fool of one of the greatest heroes of Greece; I will prevent it from happening again! “ He growled. Back in Crete Shappious had found a safe place to hide. She was admiring her new horses when her eye lids stared closing and blackness covered the world. here eye sockets became heavy, she tried desperately to open her eyes so she could see her surroundings but no matter how hard she tried her vision stayed black, little did she Know that in a few panic filled moments ,instead of too beautiful blue  eyes , she was destined to have eyes made out of crumbling coal for the rest of eternity and so she did , never to see the beautiful earth ever again

One thought on “Big blue eyes

  1. Amazing. But maybe next time at the start you could use a better word for ‘called’ at the start. Other than that it’s like reading…well I don’t know it’s like reading someone’s real life story. Great work you have really taken a lot of time and effort to create this mind bubbling story. You’ve also got into your story and that’s hard to do. I can’t wait to read your next piece of work.

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