: Can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrase and accurate verb choice?
They leapt from the tower ledge. As they tumbled from the ledge
towards the stormy raging sea there mighty feathered
wings sprung open. They shot manifestly across the sea.
As they rose higher and higher Icarus forgot about the warning that Daedalus had given him. He rose higher and higher.
Next he felt the wax dripping off his colourful wings.
With a stab of horror Icarus realised he was no longer able to fly.
He stared to plumit down towards the dark raging sea.
With an enourmous splash Icarus fell into the sea and moved no more.
Lucas – what a great piece of writing! You have chosen some very powerful adjectives to describe your nouns and these all help your readers to build a picture of the scene in their minds. I particularly like ‘mighty , feathered wings’ – in my mind I can see the men below these huge wings soaring through the sky. Well done you!
Mrs Grant
thank you for your comment mrs grant
i worked really hard on this i chose mighty feathered wings because
in the story they are vary powerful objects.
thank you for your comment. I chose my adjectives very carefully so that you can
have a clear image in your mind.