LO: can I retell the ending of a story using noun phrases and accurate verb choice?
They leapt out of the tower window, adrenalin pumping in there vains. They were out! They were plummeting towards the ground, seconds away from death! Their wings sprang to life as they were lifted into the azure sky, like the gods had lifted them and welcomed them to their world. The blistering pain from the wax had nearly vanished. “Don’t fly t high or the wax on your back will melt! Daedilus warned. Icarus ignored his father for he thought he was better at flying than the sun god himself! Up he soared until he was flying with the clouds. The powerful sun god, Apollo was furious that a mere mortal like Icarus would challenge him! Apollo shot a raise of sun upon Icarus’s back. Icarus plunged into the waters deep.
Icarus was never to be seen again. Or was he?
The use of a simile to describe the actions of the gods makes the piece very vivid. The final question brings the reader into the tale – what is the effect of involving readers in this way? Can you think of other writers who do this?
It will make them enjoy the book more and also make them want to read on. I think Jaquline Wilson also brings the reader into her stories.
Thank you!
Great work Ava!
I really like your last question because you never know if you see him or not. Also I love your simile because it gives more detail.
You have made some very effective choices of vocabulary to build your descriptions, just like authors do. The use of words to describe the heat and anger are particularly powerful. Well done, Ava!
Mrs Grant
Thank you Mrs Grant